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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007.
The chart compares three countries in terms of their unemployment rates between 1993 and 2007.
Overall
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, the number of unemployed people increased in Japan,
while
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 the UK and the rest of Europe decreased significantly over the 14-year period between 1993 and 2007. As the graph shows, in the rest of Europe, the
number of
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unemployedment
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unemployment
 rate was about 9
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percentage
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 in 1993.
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 it rose considerably to just over 10
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 in 1997. And it remained unchanged at 8
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 from 2001 to 2005.
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 the figure declined significantly to approximately 7.8
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 in 2007. Regarding the UK, unemployment rates were 11
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 in 1993. After
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 it decreased rapidly to roughly 4.3
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 in 2005. And it rose slightly to about 5
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 in 2007. In terms of Japan, the number of unemployed was just over 2
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 in 1993. After
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 the figure increased considerably to just under 6
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 in 2003. It fell sharply to about 3.8
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 in 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 10 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unemployment rate
  • Fluctuation
  • Economic growth
  • Economic recovery
  • Comparative analysis
  • Steady decline
  • Modest stability
  • Broader economic challenges
  • Economic reform
  • Structural issues
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