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The diagram below shows how ethanol fuel is produced from corn. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The diagram below shows how ethanol fuel is produced from corn. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how ethanol fuel is produced from corn. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The diagram below shows how ethanol fuel is produced from corn. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The flow diagram illustrates the production process of ethanol fuel from corn.
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, there are nine steps
of
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in
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 the whole
procedure
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starts
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starting
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 from corn collection and
end
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by
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with
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transportation
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the transportation
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 of ethanol. In the
beganing
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beginning
, the collected corn is stored and it is added
in
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to
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miller
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the miller
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 for milling into small fragments. After 4 hours cooking with additional water, those tiny fragments are transported into fermenting for
next
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 2 days. And
then
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, it is separated into two parts, the solid part is removed from the procedure as
by-product
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a by-product
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. The liquid part goes to the next purifying step. After five hours of purification, ethanol, the final
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product
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products
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products,
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 is stored and transported to customers afterwards.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ethanol
  • corn
  • harvesting
  • milling
  • cooking
  • fermentation
  • distillation
  • dehydration
  • enzymes
  • fermentable sugars
  • concentration
  • anhydrous ethanol
  • fuel
  • processed
  • mixture
  • yeast
  • carbon dioxide
  • high temperatures
  • surface area
  • separation
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