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Band 4

Everybody should be allowed admission to university or college programs regardless of their level of academic ability. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The admission of enrolling university or college course should permit all individuals regardless of their academic rank
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 academic ability. In
this
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 essay, I will explain with an agreed-upon opinion and give reasons from my perspective. Each college or university should accept
students
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 from all over the world, where there are a lot of
students
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 who are struggling the attend university because of their ambition. Everybody has their own charm ,
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 only looking for the top student’s
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 is unbelievable for me. From my perspective as a junior, who wants to go study
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 is one of my wish-list. To have a high grade point average, take
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the International
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 Assessment Test are some of the inevitable
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 for
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 who are willing to go abroad.
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, we do not want universities to reject us because of our marks on
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 or academic level.
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, we are just kids who are trying to experience other
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 culture and live independently. For the majority of
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 struggle with getting these
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 and they stress so much that
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 even look for future jobs. Looking for the
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 who have intelligence could be too cruel for poor
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 who are financially issue. Because it influences children's
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 can not to afford the materials, books, and stationery.
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, having no support from their family can affect their
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. But they need to see each pupil's dream, ambition, creativity,
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 skills rather than hard skills. Because
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 nowadays employers are looking for
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 who are outgoing and have the ability to communicate with people no problems. In conclusion, seeing only children's marks on
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 or
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 of academic ability can not fully show
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' capability of doing things.
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, there are lots of
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 who can not afford school supplies and stationery , which could
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 '
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. So
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 agree with the statement.

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task
Start with a clear yes or no. State your view in one simple line at the start.
structure
Make a short plan before you write. Use an intro, 2–3 body parts, and a quick end.
coherence
Each paragraph should talk about one main idea. Begin with a simple sentence that tells the idea, then add support.
coherence
Use linking words like and, but, because, also to show the links between ideas.
language
Keep words simple. Use small sentences. Check your grammar and fix big mistakes.
content
Give a real example from life and explain it in a few words to show your point.
language
Check spelling of common words (countries, materials, etc.) and use the same form all through the essay.
idea
You show care for fairness for all students.
personal
You tell of a wish to study abroad and the wish to learn.
content
You note money problems and stress as hard parts that stop students from doing well.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic ability
  • higher education
  • equality
  • diversity
  • inclusivity
  • alternative admission criteria
  • skilled individuals
  • learning environment
  • perspectives
  • practical skills
  • portfolios
  • diverse student bodies
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