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Band 4.5

Some universities now offer their course so that people can study online. Is it a positive or negative development.

Many educational institutions
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 have now made their courses available online for
students
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 to study. I believe
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 is a very positive development in the field of education, and I will explicate my point
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 in
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 essay. First and foremost, with the increasing inflation,
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 of all the basic things has been on
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 rise.
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, most of the
students
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 drop out of their
studies
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,
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 family obligations, and to
be
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earn
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 a
earning hand
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living
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.
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, children face
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a lack
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 of time to complete their education, and in
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 cases, online
studies
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 prove to be a great sigh of relief, because
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they
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enables
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enable
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 them to study
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 whenever they want. They have access to their classes all the time, which helps them to finish their course for a better future.
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, most of the
students
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 in
USA
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 and Canada have to work in order to support a decent lifestyle, and
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 prefer studying at night through online means.
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, sometimes, situations arise which cause inability for a person to visit the school physically.
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, a child may get involved in an accident, and cannot go to college for a
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 period of time. In
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 scenario, internet access to his classes may help him
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to
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continue his
studies
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 from home without any kind of obstruction.
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, some
univerisities
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universities
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 offer free access to their online study material, which
help
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helps
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 the
students
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of
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poor
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the poor
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 section of
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society
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 to finish
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their
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,
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 and
hence
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 find a good job to
increase
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improve
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the
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their
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 quality of
their
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life. Conclusively, I would say online classes are a great means of promoting education among those
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 who are not able to physically attend a school, and provide an opportunity to
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students
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, finish
up
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their qualification for a better future.

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language
Fix errors in grammar and word form. Many sentences have wrong or missing words, such as 'a earning hand' and 'sigh of relief'. Use simple, correct phrases.
structure
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add a couple of sentences to explain it.
content
Provide more precise examples and explain how they back your point. Tie each example to the reason you state.
surface
Check spelling of common words and keep a formal tone. Avoid slang and awkward phrases.
content
The writer states a clear view on online study.
structure
Good use of link words such as First, Secondly, Conclusively.
content
Ideas show how online study can help many students.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • access
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • benefit
  • problem
  • solution
  • important
  • choice
  • time
  • place
  • home
  • study
  • student
  • university
  • course
  • online
  • learn
  • teach
  • cost
  • save
  • tech
  • internet
  • support
  • quality
  • risk
  • future
  • job
  • mix
  • hybrid
  • face-to-face
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