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Band 1

Percentages of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features. Summarize the table.

The table provides information about the proportion of what mobile phone
users
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 do
in
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on
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 their phones.
Overall
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,all given activities
users
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 are increased in
given
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the given
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 period.
people
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People
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 make calls more than other features in all three given years.
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however
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However
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,
record
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recording
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 video is not in trend in all three years. Phone
users
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play
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played
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 games and
play
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listened to
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 music a little bit in 2006,17
and
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, and
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 12,but in 2008
this
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 number
was
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apply
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jumped to 42 gamers and 18 music
likers
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listeners
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,in
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. In
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 2010 gamers size was decreased to 41,
while
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 who play
music
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of music
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 was increased to 26
in
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apply
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2010.
Make
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Making
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 calls was the most popular thing that
users
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do
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did
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 in 2006,2008
and
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, and
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 2010,with 100,100 and 99.
Send
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Sending
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 and
receive
Wrong verb form
receiving
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 text messages was
second
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the second
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 most popular
reoson
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reason
,with 73 in 2008,75 in 2008 and 79 in 2010.There is no data
in
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from
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 2006
how
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on how
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 many people use
phone
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phones
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 to search the internet,but in 2008 it was 41,and
was
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it was
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 73 in
2010
Punctuation problem
2010,
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 respectively.

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task response
Task response: The summary should give a clear overall idea of the table first, then describe the main points with data from the years. Use exact figures when you can.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a short overview, then a paragraph for each main idea. Use linking words like also, but, and to show how ideas fit.
grammar
Language and form: There are many grammar mistakes. Use small, simple sentences and common forms. Check plural and verb forms.
data
Data and numbers: Check the years and numbers. If you are unsure, use words like 'about' or 'many' instead of wrong figures.
content
The writer tries to give an overall view of the table and compare parts.
data
Some figures from the table are used to show changes over time.
structure
The plan is there to use an opening idea and then compare items.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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