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In today's busy world, maintaining a good work-life balance has become increasingly difficult for many people. What are the main reasons for this problem? What solutions can help people achieve a better work-life balance?

Nowadays, for planty of professions it can be hard to keep a work-life balance.
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 the reason for
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 is quite global, ranging from an increase in consumption to a lack of specialists, it depends on the person
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 he or she can handle
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 task.
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 essay will explain possible reasons for getting worse work conditions, specifically in veterinary medicine, and try to suggest a solution. Beginning with the base of the problem,
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 in the modern world, demand exceeds supply. So it can be difficult to have a
company
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 team which is able to cover all tasks. Workers doing work outside their area of responsibility and going home late are widely common in many professions.
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, focusing on the veterinary, doctors have to not only take appointments, but
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 clean up their cabinets because of
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 of enough assistants.
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, the main difficulties in keeping work-life balance are the imbalance between the number of employees and the amount of work in a
company
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. Talking about the possible solution, there are two approaches. If you are a head of
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, the limitation of amount of new tasks based on the opportunity of your team is critical. But in the case of workers, probably, the best decision is to choose the right job with the best conditions.
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, doctors who are looking for a new workplace should ask about extra pay for working late and so on. So, there is no single solution for improving life-work balance
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, everybody can make
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 in their own life or their own
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 up, we can say that the modern world demands more than people can give, so it leads to increasing requirements for workers.
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 there is no best way to solve
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 problem, companies should take care of their employees
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 employees are supposed to defend their rights.

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structure
Make a plan and tell the reader what you will talk about. Use two big ideas in the essay.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go up or down and how they fit.
content
Give one or two real examples from work life to show why balance is hard.
task response
End with a clear view and a short idea that fits the start.
content
The idea of people in vet work not having enough staff is shown.
structure
The essay has an idea of a plan to end with a view.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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