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The plans below show how a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps illustrate the advancement in a harbour since 2000.
Overall
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, the construction of another ship dock, combined with upgrades in infrastructure, brought forth various changes to the Porth Harbour. Looking into details, the North area had an upgrade of another Passenger ferry dock, alongside switching the location of the private yachts and the public fishing boats area in the centre of the bay. A different entrance to the car park has been constructed with a shower and toilet area that comes with it. These changes were made
due to
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 the reconstruction of the old castle into a hotel. Coming from the main road, visitors could use the newly opened side road to arrive at the Hotel. There are new Cafes and Shops on the road leading to the hotel next to the Lifeboat, and a Private beach has been repurposed from the public beach for the hotel’s visitors' usage.

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global
Give a clear view at once. Start with a simple summary of the map in 2000 and now.
coherence
Group ideas. Put all changes in order. Use words like first, next, and finally.
task
Make sure you compare 2000 and now for each big change.
grammar
Use short, clean sentences. Avoid long lines. Check punctuation and grammar.
lexical
Keep names simple and small. Use the same name every time.
content
You give many detail about changes like new ship dock and more road to hotel.
structure
You show link between change and new hotel.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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