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Writing Samples
Band 2

Some people like adventurous sports. Why Is this and what are the effects ?

There is no denying the fact that
community
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the community
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 believed that different sports
amazing
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are amazing
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 to
discovered
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discover
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.
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that many sports have different feelings, there is
also
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that
try
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trying
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 the sport
make
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makes
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 you more healthy.
To begin
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 with, the most common thing that try
the
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apply
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riding the wave by using special tools. In
othere
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other
 words, there is
motivate
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motivation
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 when you
discovered
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discover
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somthing
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something
 new. In
additional
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addition
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, I visited Turkey
last
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 month and I went to
river
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the river
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 to get lessons about the history of
the
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apply
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rowing
the
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boats.
Anothere
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Another
 point to consider, some kids were scared about the idea because they did not learn. It is
also
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 possible to say that important to feel strong to do some activities.
For instance
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, Flex was from NASA, made
story
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a story
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 by
jumped
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jumping
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 from the vehicle to the earth. In conclusion, despite people having
difference
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different
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 views, I believe that if you
gained
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gain
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 more knowledge about how you love and believe
yourself
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in yourself
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, you will win.

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a clear idea and then give 2 or 3 small points to support it.
linking
Use easy link words to show how ideas are connected: first, next, also, but, finally.
grammar
Keep grammar simple. check verb form and noun for each sentence.
content
Give one clear example for each point and make sure it fits what you say.
strength
You give your own view and try to show why people may like sport.
strength
You try to use a story or fact to explain ideas.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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