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Band 4.5

A magazine wants to include contribution from its readers for an article called 'the book that influenced me most". Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influences you most. In your letter, describe what this book was about, explain how this book influenced you, say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to address my interest
for
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 your article regarding the
book
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 that influenced me most.
I
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I've
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 been reading your books since
age
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the age
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 of 18 and
i
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I
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 really appreciate your
hardwork
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hard work
 of making fantastic stories which inspire people. The
book
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 which has most of the positive impact on me is "
the roses
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The Roses
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 of
life
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Life
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". I am
obessed
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obsessed
 with the story outline of
an
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a
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 girl who brings happiness
in
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to
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 everyone's life and
feel
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feels
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 positivity. During my reading, I lived the life of that girl named Rosey and
its
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it
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 inspired me to
give
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do
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 good deeds
to
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for
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 people.
According to
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 my perspective. I
beleive
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believe
this
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book
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 includes all the
keypoints
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 that should be followed by everybody in
this
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 world. If people do
good
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a good
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thing
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thing,
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then
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 they
got
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the
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apply
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good deeds in return
and
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, and
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 as mentioned in the
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book
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book,
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 it could be
any
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in any
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 form. I hope you like
this
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 idea
,
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;
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your time for reading my letter is appreciated. Your faithfully, Bavneet

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task response
Explain the book with a short, clear plot summary and keep one main idea in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Fix grammar and spelling mistakes, and use simple forms like I have, it is, they are.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to show how ideas are connected, such as also, but, and therefore.
content
The letter shows a real wish to share how a book can shape the person.
structure
There is a greeting and a closing, which shows form of letter writing.
content
The writer gave a view on whether the book could help others.
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