IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world's fuel resouces. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statatment?

There is no denying the fact that
fuels
Fix the agreement mistake
fuel
show examples
have
Wrong verb form
consumption has
show examples
 greatly increased over the
last
Linking Words
 decade or two.
Linking Words
while
Fix capitalization
While
show examples
 it is a commonly held belief
prices
Correct word choice
that prices
show examples
 of
feuls
Correct your spelling
fuels
 have greatly increased,there is
also
Linking Words
n
Correct your spelling
no
 argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that
the
Change preposition
over the
show examples
last
Linking Words
 decade
the
Punctuation problem
, the
show examples
 prices of fuels have greatly increased.
To begin
Linking Words
 with,

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

structure
State a clear view in the introduction and restate it in the conclusion. Add 2 or 3 main points with simple facts or examples.
coherence
Make ideas flow with clear links. Use simple connectors and sign posts so the reader can follow.
grammar
Use simple grammar. Check for run‑on sentences, spaces after periods, and common misspellings.
planning
Plan before you write. A simple outline with intro, 2 body paragraphs, and a short conclusion helps.
strength
The writer shows a personal view.
strength
There is an attempt to link ideas with some phrases.
strength
Topic is a real issue and the writer uses English to talk about it.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: