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Band 2.5

As most people spent a major part of their life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well being. How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

In
this
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mordern
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modern
 day and age, job
sastisfaction
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satisfaction
 is a part of
life
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 at
work
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. But the feeling of
fully
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being fully
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 happy is not realistic for all
workers
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.
In
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On
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 the one hand, at the workplace
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workers
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, workers
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 may
process
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perform
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 many
part
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parts
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 of their job which
requires
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require
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 skills, and time to do it
perfect
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perfectly
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. In
this
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 process, they must concentrate and
work
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 under a huge pressure of
deadline
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a deadline
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.
Beside
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of
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apply
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that, everyone
have
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has
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 different
life
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 goals and outside factors that
effect
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affect
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 how they feel at
work
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.
This
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 is why
workers
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 feel
pleasent
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pleased
 at all day at
workplace
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the workplace
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 is very unrealistic
at
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apply
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all
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apply
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.
In
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On
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 the other hand, people may see
some
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a
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 worker happy at
work
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. Because they can balance between
life
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 and
work
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. They
work
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 hard and
pay
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are paid
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 fair. The second factor
contriute
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contributing
 to
is
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this is
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 that they got support from
boss
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their boss
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 and good
teamate
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teammates
 at
work
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, so they have
chance
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the chance
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 to boost up and learn new
thing
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things
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. But
this
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 is just a small
percent
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percentage
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 of all
worker
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workers
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,
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;
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therefore
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therefore,
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 the workplace should help all worker fit their job and
life
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 by
pay
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paying
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fair
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fairly
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 and
provide
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providing
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 good conditions of working
.
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conditions.
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 In conclusion, it is hard to make all
workers
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 happy, but we can improve
mood
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the mood
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 at
work
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 by good design, fair rules and real care for people.

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task response
Make your view clear. Say if you think all workers can be happy or not. Add one or two real cases from work life to back your point.
coherence
Put your ideas in a clear plan. Use simple links like first, next, and last. Keep each sentence short.
content
You show you know the topic and the idea of two sides.
structure
You end with a short, clear closing.
content
You mention fair pay and good boss as helps, which is good.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job
  • work
  • happy
  • feel
  • need
  • want
  • different
  • good
  • pay
  • hour
  • time
  • stress
  • team
  • boss
  • place
  • safe
  • bad
  • support
  • grow
  • learn
  • mean
  • purpose
  • fit
  • meaning
  • balance
  • choice
  • career
  • life
  • health
  • home
  • hours
  • day
  • see
  • say
  • use
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