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Over-tourism in popular destinations is damaging both the environment and local cultures. What are the reasons behind this surge in tourism, and how can the negative impacts be mitigated?

In
this
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 modern era,
people
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 often visit different
places
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while
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 enjoying their vacations.
Nowdays
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, destruction of
propertities
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properties
 and
high risk
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incident
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incidents
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on
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in
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tourist
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places
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has
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have
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become usual
and
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, and
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 local folks are suffering
with
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from
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 drawbacks. There are many reasons behind
this
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 issue
and
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 it will be discussed in the following paragraphs with effective solutions.
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causes
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, oer tourism
has been majorily
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occured
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occurred
 when the
tourist
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 place
has lack
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lacks
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of
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apply
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management
which
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, which
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 includes less security on
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places
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the places
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, no restrictions, and poor hygiene.
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, no time limit for visitors and cheap prices of tickets could lead to
worse
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a worse
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this
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situation.
As a result
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, Incidents like misbehaving, kidnapping and stealing
happens
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happen
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.
For example
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, in an article from
2018
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2018,
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 it has been stated that
places
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 like Niagara
gets
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get
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overcrowdd
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overcrowded
 on every
wekend
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weekend
 as there
is
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are
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 no tickets and no restrictions
which
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, which
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consequently
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 results in incidents. To mitigate
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this
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these
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 issues, there should be ticket prices which would include
,
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apply
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 some
smound
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amount
 for management works and to hire new staff
according to
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 the needs, there should be banners or memos with
warning
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warnings
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 and
guldelines
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guidelines
 on
it
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them
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 to prevent
enviornmet
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environmental
 damages and
equipements
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equipment
 like accessible bins should be provided for better results.
As a
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result
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result,
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people
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 might follow rules. There should be a
tourist
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 guide provided on every
tourist
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 site
which
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 would help
people
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 to learn and gain knowledge about the local culture
and
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 it could be respected if they got to know about it. Resultantly,
tourist
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places
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 could be
manageable
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 by approaching different positive interventions
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,
their
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there
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has
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have
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 been problems going on in various
tourists
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tourist
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places
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 over different topics
but
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, but
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 it could be
convinent
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convenient
 to
followup
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follow up
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 with solutions and work on it.
With
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By
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 applying the solutions of
this
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 cause ,
people
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 could enjoy their tourism
and
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, and
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 local culture could be saved
and
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, and
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hygeine
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hygiene
 would be
prioritize
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prioritised
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.

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structure
Work on a clear plan. Start with a short intro, then two body parts: causes and solutions, then a short conclusion.
coherence
Keep ideas simple and linked. Use words like 'also', 'but', 'therefore' to show how one idea leads to the next.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar. Check 'over-tourism', 'different', 'habits', and 'there is' vs 'there are'. Use basic verb forms correctly.
vocabulary
Use basic, common words. Do not use long, hard words. The target is top 100 words.
content
Give more specific examples or facts to support points. If you mention a place, add a small fact about it.
structure
The essay tries to cover both causes and ways to fix the problem.
content
It uses some references to action, like tickets and guides, showing a plan.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourism
  • visitors
  • crowd
  • environment
  • nature
  • culture
  • local
  • people
  • money
  • jobs
  • business
  • price
  • plan
  • limit
  • policy
  • tax
  • fee
  • rule
  • law
  • permit
  • diversify
  • sustainable
  • green
  • clean
  • waste
  • water
  • pollution
  • traffic
  • noise
  • travel
  • flight
  • train
  • bus
  • bike
  • walk
  • hotel
  • shop
  • community
  • involve
  • education
  • awareness
  • respect
  • heritage
  • authentic
  • should
  • could
  • would
  • can
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