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Band 3

it is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, houshold chores or looking after children.is this a good way of providing work for others? should people do these things themselves?

For every housewife, housework is endless and annoying, so there are occupations of babysitters, careworkers, and professional gardeners. Are these vocations good for our society?
shouldn't
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 the residents complete family projects on their own? I assume that everyone is good at
soththing
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something
,
as well as
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 bad at something.
Accordingly
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, leaving housework
for
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professional
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professionals
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 promotes the diversity of employment.
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, some international students
,
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who
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are good at
turtoring
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tutoring
 and
babysittering
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babysitting
. are in need of part-time jobs. Why not give them a chance?
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, some are
talent
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 at cooking, cleaning and tidying up
and
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 they
posted on
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 their service on social media. Citizens only need to make an appointment to have
in door
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availableness
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availability
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. To some
extend
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extent
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, people who are
tied
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 of house
chiors
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chores
 not only provide employment but
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 boost the entire economy. As
i
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I
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 said, domestic works exist
everyda
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every
, it
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day, it
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' unlikely for
housholds
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households
 to finish it on their own. Most working-class parents have to go
work
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to work
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, and after a long day of commuting and dealing with tough problems in
office
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the office
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, washing dishes, cleaning
carpeters
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carpets
, mowing
loans
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lawns
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 and providing company can be a
realy burdern
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real burden
, which may
rigger
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trigger
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 a mental burst
such
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 as depressure, anxiety, and insomnia.
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, city
dewllers
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dwellers
 should choose housework as
alternative
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, and only do it when feeling good or
relax
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relaxed
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.
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, let others undertake
demostic
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domestic
 jobs
diverses
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diversify
 the employment market and the public should only do it as a pleasure
instead
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 of a
burdern
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burden
.

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task
State your view clearly in the opening and in the end. Tell the reader if you think this is good or not, and give two reasons.
coherence
Make the plan and keep to it. Each para has one main idea. Use a simple link word to move from one idea to next.
task
Use clear examples. Try to show facts that support your point.
language
Check spelling and grammar a lot. Use simple and short sentences so the reader can follow your idea.
content
The topic is clear and shows you want to discuss a real issue.
content
Some ideas about how others can have work and how this can help the economy.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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