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Governments should pay for people’s education and health care. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that some community pays for the two sectors of school and hospital.
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 it is a commonly held belief that all
people
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 should the contry
give
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given
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them
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apply
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money
for
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by
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 the education and health care. There is
also
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argument
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an argument
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 that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that
agreement
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an agreement
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 would be better for family
lifes
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life
.
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 with, the life of the
people
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 will be
more
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apply
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easier so they
got
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have
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 a lot of budget.
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, the ministry
occurs
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provides
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 the family
a
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with a
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laptop, microwave and washer.
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,
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this
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these
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 ideas support the society of the
contry
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country
.
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, the poor
is
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are
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 the
worset
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worst
 thing
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due to
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because
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 the company does not offer
job
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a job
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.  Another point to consider, the
comunity
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community
 needs care to be
more storng
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stronger
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 and they have
long
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a long
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 life. It is
also
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 possible to say that building more care
center
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centres
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 will support all.
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, if you motivate
the
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apply
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people
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 to try the sport,
will
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they will
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 all be in
a
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apply
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better health.
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, my father gained muscles
last
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 month
which
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, which
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is perfectly
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perfectly
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perfect
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. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views, I
beilieve
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believe
 that it is a good idea that
give
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gives
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people
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pound
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pounds
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 they can buy anything they want.

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Be clear on your view in the first lines and keep it to the end.
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Add two or three strong reasons and explain how they help people.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words so the text reads in a smooth way.
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Use a real example that fits the idea and explain it.
content
The writer shows a position on the topic.
coherence
Some linking words are used.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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