The chart shows the percentage of dependents in total population in 5 countries, compared the number in 2000 and the projection in 2050.

The chart shows the percentage of dependents in total population in 5 countries, compared the number in 2000 and the projection in 2050.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart shows the percentage of dependents in total population in 5 countries, compared the number in 2000 and the projection in 2050.
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, there will be an upward trend in terms of the percentage of dependents in the majority of countries and worldwide.
While
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the figures for two of them are projected to exceed the
world
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average in 2050, the other three are likely to be lower. In 2000, the
world
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average
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was about 33%, and India had the highest percentage, at around 38%. During
this
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time, the
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for Insonisia and China, which was on a par, was slightly higher than the global average, with about 35%.
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, the remaining countries-Korea and Japan had a lower dependent population than the
world
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average, at 28% and 31% respectively, with Korea the lowest among all countries. In 2050, people
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who need
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support
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projected to
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up over 40% of global citizens, increasing by 7%. Korea and Japan will witness a significant increase, rising sharply to around 49%, which is higher than
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world
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the world
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average level.
By comparison
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, the other three countries’ dependent population is forecast to be fewer than the
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for
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world
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the world
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average.
Insonisia
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India
and China will experience
a
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apply
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moderate growth, reaching
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36% and 38%,
while
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the
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for India will dramatically drop, falling to 31%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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