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Writing Samples
Band 4

An historic building in your city is in bad condition. Write to the local government. Include in your letter: Why the building is important Its present condition What action must be taken

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my concern regarding the deterioration of the heritage site in our locality, which is the Taj Mahal. It was constructed 1000 years ago by the ruling King. It is the main highlight of our city, which
attract
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attracts
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 numerous tourists throughout the year.
Due to
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 the influx of visitors in the peak seasons, land pollution around the monument is escalating
due to
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 the low
maintainance
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maintenance
 by janitors and unawareness about maintaining cleanliness. People are dumping plastic waste around the building, making it a garbage dumping site. I would like to request
you
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that you
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to
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apply
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take the necessary actions to mitigate
this
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 condition. Inspection should be done every month
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, and
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 cameras should be installed around the building. Dustbins should be placed near the
building
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building,
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 followed by
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the 3'R
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 rule. Thank you in advance for considering my request
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 Kind regards, Kajalpreet

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structure
Write in clear steps: first say why the building matters, then its current state, then what you ask.
grammar
Use simple and standard phrases. Fix small grammar errors like 'attracts' and 'maintenance'.
structure
Make each paragraph talk about one idea only. Start with one idea per paragraph.
fact-check
Check facts like the date and who built the place before you write.
tone
Polite tone and clear aim to help the place.
content
The letter shows three main parts: why it matters, current state, actions.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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