The charts show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie graphs
illurstrate
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illustrate
the
porportion
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proportion
of three different ingredients-
sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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in
breakfast
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, lunch,
dinner
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and
snacks
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, which are all unhealthy to
absort
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absorb
excessively.
Overall
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, both
sodium
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and saturated fat account for
dominant
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the dominant
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proportion in
dinner
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while
Punctuation problem
, while
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added
sugar
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was
Wrong verb form
is
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used the most in
snacks
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.
In contrast
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, these three nutrients
Verb problem
play take
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take
Use the right word
the
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least part in
breakfast
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.
According to
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sodium
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and saturated fat, the
percentage
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percentages
show examples
in
dinner
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are 43% and 37% respectively, which stand for the majority. The following
mael
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meal
is lunch, with 29% and 26%. Meanwhile,
sodium
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in
breakfast
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and
snacks
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both
account
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accounts
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for 14%.
In contrast
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, these two meals contain saturated fat with 16% and 14%, which
stand
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stands
show examples
more
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in a greater
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proportion than
sodium
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does.
Besides
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, the percentage of saturated fat in four meals is relatively
more average
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higher
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than others.
Conversely
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, the percentage of added
sugar
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in
snacks
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is 42%, which is even double
than
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that
show examples
other two nutrients.
While
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added
sugar
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in lunch and
dinner
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is only 19% and 23% and the proportion of these two meals is less than
sodium
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and saturated fat.
In addition
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, added
sugar
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in
breakfast
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is as much as saturated fat, with the
pecentage
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percentage
of 16%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, breakfast, dinner, snacks, sodium with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average percentages
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • meal
  • typical meals
  • categories
  • high percentage
  • distribution
  • patterns
  • trends
  • nutrient-dense
  • data
  • comparison
  • summarize
  • reporting main features
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