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The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010.

The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010.
The graph illustrates different categories of items which was consumed from 1950 until 2010 in Australia . Units are measured by kg per person per year.
Overall
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, vegetables were the highest throughout the experiment, meat fluctuated during the whole time, and the fruit was rapidly rising ,
whereas
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 seafood was the lowest with a Slight increase over time. In the year 1970, meat and vegetables were going up and down until 1990, where both increased sharply (160 kilos and 140 respectively) and were almost the same in that exact year , with around 120kg. Bread was gradually increasing from 1950 and 1970 and was decreasing steadily,
in Contrast
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 to fruit , which had a dramatic increase between 1970 and 2010 . Seafood was almost constant across all eras.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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