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Band 4.5

In all countries, there are driving laws to ensure road safety. However, some people still break these laws, such as by using mobile phones while driving or by speeding.

In all countries, there are driving
laws
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 to ensure
road
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safety
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.
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, some
people
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 still break these
laws
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,
such
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 as by using mobile phones
while
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 driving or by speeding. What are the reasons for
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this
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 What could be the best solution to
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 problem
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 Nowadays, in all countries,
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governments have implemented various driving
laws
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 to ensure
road
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safety
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.
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, certain
people
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 still do not obey these
rules
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for
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 example by using mobile phones during driving time or by increasing
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the speed
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 limit. From my perspective, governments should introduce new and stronger
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 in order to effectively address these problems. In recent years, vehicle
accidents
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 have been increasing year by year. The main reason for
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 condition is not only drivers breaking
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safety
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rules
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.
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, on certain roads,
traffic
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rules
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 are not
well-organized
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, many drivers do not know how to operate their transport in different situations.
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, sometimes
people
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 break
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 on purpose when they are in a hurry, when they are intoxicated or when they do not pay attention to
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 signs.
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result
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 many drivers face
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dangerous situations or cause them to break the
road
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safety
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laws
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. I strongly believe that, in order to prevent
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situation
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a situation
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, the government should pay more attention to
traffic
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rules
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 by introducing new
laws
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, reviewing
road
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safety
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 signs and providing stronger education for obtaining driving licenses. In conclusion, in my opinion, unless all governments change these conditions,
traffic
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accidents
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 will continue to increase.
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, many
people
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 might suffer various
accidents
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.
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, the government has various radio and TV channels,
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 may be a good way to inform
people
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 by discussing
road
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accidents
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 and their consequences.

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task
Improve task response by giving a clear plan in the intro and make the main points stand in their own paragraph.
coherence
Use clear order and linking words to show how ideas fit together, such as first, next and finally.
language
Check grammar and word use; avoid odd phrases like 'increasing speed limit' and 'driving time'. Use simple, correct forms.
content
Choose examples that fit the point you make and fix mistakes that make meaning unclear.
structure
End with a strong closing line that sums up your view and does not repeat points.
structure
The writer states a clear topic and gives an overall view.
content
There is an attempt to give reasons and a solution.
structure
The piece shows some effort to structure with an intro and a conclusion.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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