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Band 1

Describe bahaviors that are important for success in shcool. Why are these behaviors are important? Use examples from your own experience and observations to explain your prespective.

To be successful in
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 a student should be consistent and humble.
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 helps in getting higher grades, and being humble to learn from the teacher and gain more
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information
 from the teachers who have more knowledge, which will
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 the students to success in
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school
. I believe being humble in my daily life will help me to learn more
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people
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the people
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 around me, not
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 the teachers but
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 parents
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 example, and listen to their wisdom and implement it in my real life. I had many
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classmates
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 was in high school, and the ones who
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 were so consistent and humble in the class than those who were absent all the
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 in classes and did not listen to what
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 because they believed that they
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knew
 everything.

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task response
Make your big idea clear in the first line. Then add more detail on how being steady and kind help you in class. Give one real life example.
coherence and cohesion
Plan your writing before you write. Put ideas in a good order: first, then, next, finally. Use words that join ideas like and, but, also. Try to make two or three parts in the text.
content
The topic is clear and shows a good aim.
style
You use a real life example to show your point.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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