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It is often said that exams are a poor way of evaluating students’ ability, and that they cause a great deal of unnecessary stress. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

Some people believe that
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 are neither a fair tool for evaluating
students
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’ abilities nor beneficial to their mental well-being.
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, I disagree with
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 opinion. In my view,
examinations
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 not only provide
students
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 with a clear goal to work towards but
also
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 bring moderate
pressure
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, which can be transformed into positive motivation.
Examinations
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 are not only effective and objective tools for evaluating
students
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’ abilities and skills, but
also
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 serve as a clear goal for their learning. Unlike coursework or group projects, which
students
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 may complete with external assistance,
examinations
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 assess individual
performance
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 under controlled conditions.
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, having an upcoming
examination
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 can motivate
students
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 to set concrete goals and ensure they review the material systematically.
For example
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, when preparing for the IELTS test, some
students
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 set a clear target, study diligently, and strive to deepen their knowledge of English. Without the goal of passing IELTS, many
students
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 might rarely review the material or
memorize
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 vocabulary, as they lack the urgency and structure needed to achieve
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 a standard.
While
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 it is true that
examination
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 can create
pressure
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,
this
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pressure
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also
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 can
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 as a positive motivation.Moderate
pressure
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 will lead to
students
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more
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 effort in learning and lead to
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better
performance
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.
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, if a student thoroughly
masted
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 a subject, he or she will be more confident and less anxious during
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examination
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the examination
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. So the key lies not in the
examination
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, but in helping student manage their stress effectively and time management. In fact, some successful people ,from
atheletes
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athletes
 to musicians ,
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 can
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a
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 excellent
performance
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 under
pressure
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. In conclusion, I believe that
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examination
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 play a significant role in both evaluating
students
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' abilities and
motiviting
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motivating
students
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 to achieve their learning
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.
Although
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 it will bring some
pressure
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,
students
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 turn it into a motivation and encourage
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 to present a better
performance
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. Rather than removing the
examination
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, educators should focus on helping
students
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how
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to
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formulate a plan for
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a long-term
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 goal and
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 them to approach it.

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content
Clear view and plan in the essay; you state your main idea well.
organization
It has a simple group of paragraphs with a start, middle and end.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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