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Writing Samples
Band 2

It is often argued that choosing a high-paying job is better than getting a job with satisfaction. I completely disagree with this opinion and think that job satisfaction is more important than high salary.

Firstly
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, I believe that
job
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 satisfaction can
give
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lead
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people
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a
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apply
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success in the
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work place
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workplace
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.
In other words
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, only if
people
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 are happy
in
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at
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work
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,
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apply
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they can
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can they
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work
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 well and solve
the
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apply
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problems well when they encounter them.
As a result
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, they can
get
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achieve
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achievements
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success
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in
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at
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work
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.
For example
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, if
people
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satisfy
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are satisfied
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in
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with
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the
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their
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work
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, they are willing to create new ideas to do better
in
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at
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work
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 and in
this
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 way they can succeed. That’s why choosing
the
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a
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job
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 which makes you happy is important.
Secondly
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, doing a
job
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 that
make
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makes
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 you happy can lead
a
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to a
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good relationship both in the
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work place
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workplace
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 and
among
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within
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 the family.
For example
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,
although
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 you get lots of money, you get lots of stress and
not
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are not
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 happy
in
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at
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work
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, it can lead you
depressed
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depression
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 and
think in
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thinking
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a
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apply
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negative
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negatively
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 way
that
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which
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 can impact to
people
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 around you. It
results
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affects
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 your performance and confidence
and
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, and
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even you may
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you may even
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 become hopeless.
To conclude
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, I strongly believe that working with passion is more important than looking for a big salary
job
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 because it can lead you
succeed
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to succeed
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 and
great
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a great
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 image in the future.

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structure
Your essay has a clear view that job happiness is more important, but start with a short intro that restates the topic.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words to show how they are connected, such as 'also', 'because', 'but'.
examples
Give one clear example for each idea and make sure the example clearly supports your point.
idea
The writer states a clear belief in the topic.
structure
Two main ideas are given to support the view.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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