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Writing Samples
Band 1

Housing shortage in big cities can cause several social consequences some people think only government can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most communities
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 large issues regarding Housing.
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 can cause several consequences. Some people think only
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government
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the government
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 can solve
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. I personally do not agree with
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.
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 essay will inform you
with
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 my personal opinion.  In my opinion
government
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 could not do anything if the price were
to
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 high or
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if thier
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thier
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there
 are limited areas that are suitable for communities. People should see the abilities of
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their
government
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 regarding any type of social
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then
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 they can get
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 accurate opinion regarding the issue.  In conclusion
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 more experience and knowledge regarding the issue
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 it will assist
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in solving
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 the issue in
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a more
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 suitable way

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structure
Plan your answer. Say your view in the first line. Then give two or three main ideas to back what you say.
grammar
Fix grammar. Watch words like 'their', 'too', 'to'. Make phrases simple and correct.
content
Use clear reasons and small examples. This helps to show why you think a point is true.
cohesion
Link ideas with small linking words such as 'first', 'also', 'but', 'however', 'in addition', 'in conclusion'.
stance
You show a view and not just facts.
structure
You have a short conclusion.
content
You mention both sides, even if not clearly.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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