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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the number of
students
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 from two different middle schools
A
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, A
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and
B
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choosing
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, choosing
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 their favourite
subject
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.
Overall
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, we can see that there are two groups,
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 A and
school
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B
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 , and there are 4 subjects .Sport was the most loved
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 among
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 in
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 A.
Whereas
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, Craft and drawing were the most picked subjects in
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B
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.
Furthermore
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, sports was the most loved
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 in
schoolA
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school
,picked
from
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 36
students
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. In second place was
science
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, picked by 9
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.
In addition
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, social
science
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 and language were really close in numbers of
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with
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 6 and 5 respectively.
Moreover
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, craft and drawing were the most picked subjects among
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 in
school
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B
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with
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 around 25
students
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. In second place comes language with about 18
students
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.
Also
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, social
science
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 and sports were really close , with the number of
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 With 6
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 and social
science
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 and 5 in sports.
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, the least loved
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 in
school
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B
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 was
science
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with
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 two
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, b, subject, school, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • favorite subjects
  • middle schools
  • horizontal axis
  • vertical axis
  • quantifies
  • preference
  • initial observation
  • significantly greater interest
  • shared enthusiasm
  • favored
  • attracts more students
  • draws the highest number
  • popularity
  • outliers
  • subject preferences
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