Scientific developments in farming always bring major benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some would argue that
science
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improvements in farming bring better
benefits
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. I agree with
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statement because
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in animal health and vaccines gives
economical
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economic
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benefits
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for the
country
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and society. Improvements in
seeds
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seed
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genetics produce better harvests and great
benefits
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for the farmer and the food industry. On one hand,
research
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in animal vaccines would help both the animals and consumers, since animal health becomes essential for animal origin products, and all the rules that the buyer imposes offer products that certify good handling in animal welfare, bringing better
benefits
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for the
farmers
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that can sell their products and satisfaction guarantee for the customers that they are going to buy an excellent product, giving economical developments for the
country
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. In Argentina, the
research
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in vaccines against foot and mouth disease virus increases the sanitary status of the
country
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and the exportations of meat, giving
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profits for the
country
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and for the cattle producers.
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, developments in genetics bring the possibility of getting better seeds
and
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consequently
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consequently,
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farmers
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have had big harvests and great
economical
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economic
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benefits
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for
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agriculture and for food companies. In Argentina, the developments in genetics of the seeds, in order to have better harvests,
increased
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have increased
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significantly the production of sunflowers and
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the production of sunflower oil, allowing the
country
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to export great amounts of oil, giving profits to the
farmers
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and
economical
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economic
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benefits
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for the
country
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.
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, always improvements in science to
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in farming produce great
benefits
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for the
farmers
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and for the economy of the
country
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.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first sentence and stay on topic. Add more detail to each idea.
coherence
Use clear link words to connect ideas within and between paragraphs.
lexical
Check word use: 'economic' not 'economical'; 'exports' not 'exportations'.
grammar
Short, simple sentences help clarity; avoid long runs.
content
Clear position in introduction and a firm view.
content
Good use of examples from Argentina to support points.
structure
Overall structure with intro, two body paragraphs, and conclusion.

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