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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

The local council has decided to destroy a building in your neighborhood. You disagree with this decision.

Dear sir or madam. I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction with
building
Correct article usage
the building
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destroy
Replace the word
destruction
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 in our
neighborhood
Use the right word
neighbourhood
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.
Furthermore
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, I disagree with
this
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 plan and I would like to request
Correct article usage
a to
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to change
Correct word order
change to
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this
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 decision. I
live
Wrong verb form
have lived
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 in Nukus for 26 years. I know most of
residents
Correct article usage
the residents
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 and activity areas. Since my childhood, I have visited to
Wonderfull
Use the right word
Wonderful
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 Word
Use synonyms
library
Punctuation problem
library,
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it
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 is both
usefull
Correct your spelling
useful
 and lovely for us. In our modern
life
Add a comma
life,
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 most
of
Change preposition
apply
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people are using the phone rather than reading books. Because of fast internet
humans
Punctuation problem
, humans
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 are getting lazy.
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Moreover
Add a comma
Moreover,
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 they think
for
Change preposition
of
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 going to the
library
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 and
find
Wrong verb form
finding
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necessary
Correct article usage
the necessary
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 books need too match time.
Whereas
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,
this
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library
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required
Verb problem
is required
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 for us. I
personaly
Correct your spelling
personally
 believe that the
library
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help
Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
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 to
yongs
Correct your spelling
people
 to improve their mental skills and increase their
world view
Use the right word
worldview
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. I hope you can address
this
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 matter promptly and provide a suitable solution. Thank you for
you
Correct pronoun usage
your
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 attention to
this
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 matter. Yours faithfully, Arislan Abdireymov.

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task response
Make the goal clear at the start. Say you do not agree and that you want the council to change the plan.
content
Add 1 or 2 strong facts or small examples on how the library helps. Tie these ideas to the plan to keep the library.
grammar
Fix small grammar and spelling errors, e.g. 'the destruction of a building' instead of 'building destroy', 'your attention' not 'you attention'.
cohesion
Use short, plain lines. Break the note into three parts: opening, body, ending. Use simple links like and, but, also, so.
grammar
Check your spelling and form. Use 'I have lived in Nukus for 26 years' instead of 'I live in Nukus for 26 years'.
tone
Polite tone.
content
Shows a real issue and place (Nukus) and a real library.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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