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The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. The table shows the average number of people each year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. The table shows the average number of people each year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of online
people
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 using different languages in December 2001,
while
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The
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 table below compares how many
people
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averagely
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 used
internet
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the internet
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 in a particular month of 5 years from 1997 to 2001.
It is clear that
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English
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the English
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 language accounted for the largest percentage of language used online in December
of
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2001.
Additionally
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, the number of
online
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apply
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people
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saw
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who saw
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 an increasing trend from 1997 to 2001.
in
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In
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 December 2001, the total
number of
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apply
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online
population
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 was 529
millon
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million
people
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with
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, with
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 43% of English speakers, making them the largest proportion. Japanese and
Chines
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Chinese
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 were the second most used languages with approximately
identical
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an identical
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 percentage of 8.9. German, Spanish and Korean accounted for 6.8%, 6.5% and 4.6%, respectively.
Duch
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Dutch
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, Portuguese, French and Italian made up 2% to 4% of
online
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the online
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 language
population
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. Other remaining proportion belonged to
the
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a
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 combination of other different languages.
According to
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 the table, the number of
the
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internet users rose sharply from 1997 to 2001. In November of 1997, only 96 million
people
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, making up 1.8% of the total
population
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 of the world, were online
;
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,
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 which almost doubled to 147 million
people
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 by September 1998. The upward trend
countinued
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continued
, and reached the peak of 513 million
people
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, accounting for 8.4% of the global
population
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • table
  • average
  • number
  • year
  • people
  • language
  • using
  • online
  • proportion
  • dominance
  • widely
  • spanish
  • chinese
  • arabic
  • trends
  • statistics
  • comparison
  • global
  • landscape
  • changes
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