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Writing Samples
Band 3

Many countries want to host international sports event, while other countries think that hosting sports event has more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
recent
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the recent
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 era, many countries want to host international sports
event
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events
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.
On the other hand
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, many critics think that hosting sports
event
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events
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 has more
problems
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comparing
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compared
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 to
benifits
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benefits
. As each has their own perspectives,
lets
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let's
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 dive deep into the below paragraphs
to
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before drawing any conclusion.
To
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At
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 the onset, there are numerous reasons to assure
it
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that it
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 is beneficial to host international events. The conspicuous one is that it really draws more revenue to the host country, which in turn develops the economy.
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,
the
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apply
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Qatar volunteered
the
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to host the
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 FIFA
world cup
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World Cup
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 event in 2022, so that it can improve its economy
along with
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 showcasing
it's
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its
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 pride to the
new comers
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newcomers
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 of the place and,
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hence
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hence,
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 can make them revisit the place again.
Nevertheless
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, there are opponents who cling
on
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apply
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to their values,
says
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saying
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 that there are more
problems
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 attached to the
benifits
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benefits
. They claim,
economy
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economic
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 growth comes with the cost of cultural damage and dirty places. They feel
,
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apply
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 it's not a cakewalk and totally collapses the system and culture we have in the country.
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, they throw random opinions on the present system of the country by judging in
a
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the
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 wrong way
and
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, and
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 so,
its
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it's
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 evident that the
problems
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over weighs
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outweigh
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benefits
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the benefits
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as
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, as
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 per
critic's
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the critic's
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 opinion. To the light of the above discussion,
although
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problems
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attached
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are attached
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 with the international hosting, in my opinion,
its
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it's
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 really beneficial and
therefore
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, countries should come forward in conducting sports or any global events.

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task
Give each idea in a clear order with a short topic sentence. Add more facts or small examples to back up your points.
coherence
Use clear linking words to join parts. Start with 'First', 'Next', 'Finally' and avoid long, odd phrases.
structure
The essay shows a view and a clear opinion at the end.
content
It uses a few links to compare sides.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • boost the economy
  • infrastructure development
  • surge in visitors
  • hospitality
  • global image
  • national pride
  • community engagement
  • grassroots level
  • financial burden
  • significant debt
  • wasted resources
  • social issues
  • displacement
  • cost of living
  • negative public sentiment
  • environmental concerns
  • habitat destruction
  • pollution
  • balanced approach
  • maximizing positive outcomes
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