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In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is, therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that family and
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essential
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 in the family.
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 it is a commonly held belief that in the
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femaly
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female
 and male work is always logical for women and men to share household tasks, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion , l consider that husband and wife are equal
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 anything in the world.
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 family is equal women and men.
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, if husband and wife work together to make a big and strong family.
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 success in the Fields of education, economy and Politics
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 guide She has the ability as a man.
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the family
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members
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a husband
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 and a wife. The parents work in
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camping
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 so there
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 more money you can send kids to school or travel. Sharing tasks and responsibilities can help a little stress. In conclusion, despite people having different views,
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 believe that it is important to divide the tasks between the spouses and treat them equally.

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content
State your view clearly at the start. Then give two or three reasons and end with a short restatement.
language
Use short, simple sentences. Choose common words from the top 100.
structure
Make four parts: intro, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Put ideas in simple order.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, also. Keep one idea per sentence to help flow.
editing
Check spelling and grammar. Fix wrong words and keep each sentence clear.
content
The essay shows the idea that men and women can share work at home.
structure
There is a closing line that marks the end of the essay.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • share
  • split
  • housework
  • chores
  • full-time
  • fair
  • equal
  • partner
  • man
  • woman
  • time
  • plan
  • discuss
  • schedule
  • divide
  • care
  • children
  • family
  • help
  • support
  • work
  • job
  • money
  • stress
  • mood
  • life
  • habit
  • idea
  • culture
  • rule
  • change
  • possible
  • better
  • skill
  • prefer
  • balance
  • day
  • week
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