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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1000 people in these countries in 2006

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1000 people in these countries in 2006
The chart gives detailed information about migrant employees over the given period.
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it is clear that
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 it was a dramatic change in the
labor
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 force of the United States.
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, it is
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 worth mentioning that the minimum number of
workers
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 was in New Zealand. Looking at the details, the proportion of personnel accounted for 162,000 in Australia in 2003. After 3 years, it
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increased sharply to 287,000. There were 10.7
workers
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 per 1000
people
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 in 2006. The workforce of New Zealand made up 65,000 and 87,000 respectively in 2003 and 2006. The figure for wage earners in 2006 stood at 21.1 per 1000
people
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.
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, more
workers
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 arrived in the United Kingdom in 2006 than in 2003, reported to
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 and 266,000. And the United Kingdom welcomed 4.4
people
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 per 1000 in 2006. The United States
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 577,000 employees in 2006.
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 proportion rose slightly
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 about 101,000. The United States has the largest number of migrant
workers
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, with 2.3 per 1000
people
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Temporary migrant workers
  • Labor mobility
  • Statistical data
  • Insights
  • Trends
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Economic growth
  • Demand for labor
  • Immigration policies
  • Disparities
  • Concentration
  • Comparative analysis
  • Consequences
  • Economic impact
  • Cultural integration
  • Social services
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