IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The table and charts below give information about doctors in Australia between 1986 and 2006. Summarise the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information about doctors in Australia between 1986 and 2006. Summarise the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides details about the number of medical professionals in
Australia
Use synonyms
 in every ten-year
period
Use synonyms
 (1986, 1996, and 2006),
while
Linking Words
 bar charts compare their percentages in terms of gender and birthplace.
Overall
Linking Words
,
Australia
Use synonyms
 experienced an increase in the quantity of
doctors
Use synonyms
 over the study
period
Use synonyms
, with significant growth registered in 2006. It's
also
Linking Words
 clear from bar charts that more males worked as
doctors
Use synonyms
 compared to their female counterparts in all three periods, and
according to
Linking Words
 the second one,
while
Linking Words
doctors
Use synonyms
 born in
Australia
Use synonyms
 almost doubled those born abroad, both figures reached parity in the third
period
Use synonyms
. In detail, in 1986, the total number of
doctors
Use synonyms
 who worked in
Australia
Use synonyms
 accounted for 23,720, and it grew by almost 6,000 every ten years, reaching 29,060 in 1996, before rising to 35,450 in 2006. As for the bar chart representing Australian gender disparity in the percentages of
doctors
Use synonyms
, three times more men used to work as
doctors
Use synonyms
 than females, standing AT 75 and 25%, respectively, in 1986. The disparity in the figures for males decreased to 60% as the number of female
doctors
Use synonyms
 climbed to 39% in 2006. A similar trend was observed in the next chart , showing the birthplaces of
doctors
Use synonyms
 who worked in
Australia
Use synonyms
. In 1986 and 1996, more than half of all
doctors
Use synonyms
 who worked in
Australia
Use synonyms
 were natives,
while
Linking Words
 the remaining were foreigners, albeit with a slight change in the latter
period
Use synonyms
, with the proportion of Australian
doctors
Use synonyms
 falling to 59 as overseas
doctors
Use synonyms
 rose to 41%. Notably, 2006 saw an equal percentage of
doctors
Use synonyms
 who were born in
Australia
Use synonyms
 and overseas, at 50%

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, period, doctors with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: