Many people think that museums and art galleries should only show work from local artists rather than from other countries . Do you agree?

There is no doubt that
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played a crucial role in preserving culture, history and
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identity. It is argued that museums should only exhibit local
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rather than international
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I acknowledge that showing
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local
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is vital to promote awareness about regional culture among the public, I believe access to
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foreign
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art work
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broads
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understanding about artistic skills and contributes to diversity.
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, I partially agree with
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view. Supporters of domestic
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argue that exhibiting local
artists
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is essential to showing support and
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because they would highlight local culture, history and
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identity
of regional
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through their artistic skills.
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, exhibiting
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can
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pass on cultures and traditions to the next generations.
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, presenting the work of
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foreign
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may discourage local
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from visiting
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galleries and museums, thereby
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arthouses
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could
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as they would become a liability for the government.
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showing domestic
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has several benefits for the local
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, it has a few drawbacks which cannot be overlooked. Several developing nations have precious artworks
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due to
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inadequate
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they are unable to preserve them.
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, many ancient
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manuscripts
from Pakistan have
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to
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for exhibiting and preserving. In
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sense, it not only represents their cultures
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golbally
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globally
, but it
also
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sure the conservation of their
arts
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.Not only does
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approach
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the
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artists
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view
but
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it
also
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provides access to
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about the global artistic beauties. In conclusion,
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supporting national
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is necessary by presenting only their
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art work
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at exhibition houses, it could
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lead to
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of creativity and limit
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artistic talents. For developing nations, showing global
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in museums is one of the best ways to preserve their artwork and represent their country's identity
worlwide
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worldwide
. Mixed exhibitions which support both local and global artworks would be an effective approach.

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content
Some examples show awareness of global art.

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