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The line graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas In a one European country between 1987 and 2007.

The line graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas In a one European country between 1987 and 2007.
The line graph compares visitors to three areas in a European country from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
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, the three areas experienced different trends in
this
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 time period.
While
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 the visitors to
coast
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the coast
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 and the lakes rose with some fluctuations, the guests of
mountains
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the mountains
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 fell over time. As a graph shows, tourists
of
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on
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coast
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the coast
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 started at 40.000 in
1987
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1987,
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 followed by a
small
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slight
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decreased
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 to around 35.000 in 1992, but
then
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this
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 figure increased rapidly to about 75.000 in 2007. Regarding the visitors of the mountains, they were 20.000
,
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however
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, it grew slightly to 30.000 in 1997 before witnessing steady growth to 30.000 and 35.000 in 2002 and 2007, respectively.
By contrast
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, the arrivals of Lake were 10.000 in 1997.
Then
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, they increased to exactly 40.000 in 1997
and
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, and
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 it rose quickly to approximately 75.000 in 2002.
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 in 2007 it declined sharply to 50.000.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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