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The two maps below show the docks of the town in 1980 and today. Summarize the onformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the docks of the town in 1980 and today. Summarize the onformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture depicts the docks prior to and following their
developments
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development
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 from 1980 to the present.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the docks have changed from an industrial zone into a recreational area. In 1980, the dock was used for merchant purposes, and a lot of business ships
commuting
Verb problem
were commuting
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 through the
river
Use synonyms
,
Punctuation problem
;
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however
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, at present, there are no ships left
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 only a museum ship is commuting. A new bride and a flood barrier have been constructed after
destruction
Correct article usage
the destruction
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 of the crane on the
river
Use synonyms
 coast. On the one side of the
river
Use synonyms
, warehouse buildings and the crane between them, just in front of the museum ship on the
river
Use synonyms
 coast, have been demolished , and they have been replaced with a shopping centre, a music club, and
children's
Correct article usage
a children's
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 play area respectively. On the other side of the
river
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, the other crane and warehouse building have been removed
,
Punctuation problem
;
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Linking Words
instead
Add a comma
instead,
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 a new walking pavement, a hotel,
restaurant
Correct article usage
a restaurant
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, and a new park have been installed.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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