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The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how
water
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 cycles in two different
area
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areas
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: forested and urban. Beginning with the process of the
water
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 cycle in Forested
, it
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areas, it
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 starts from precipitation
as well as
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 in the urban environment.
Next,
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the largest part of precipitated
water
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 infiltrates through a permeable topsoil and deeper layer
on
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of
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 rock to the
water
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 table. The smaller amount of
water
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 evaporates, not
achieved
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reaching
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 the deep layers. That
water
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 which
achieved
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reaches
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 the
water
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 table
,
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apply
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 joins the baseflow and
finally
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get
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gets
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both
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apply
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transpirated
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transpired
 through plants or runoff to lakes.
By contrast
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, in cities, options for cycling of
water
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 are reduced by
environment
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the environment
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.
So
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So,
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such
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 ways as
infiltrations
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infiltration
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, evaporation and transpiration are limited because of an absence of enought amount of trees and other plants.
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, baseflow is
redused
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reduced
 as well. It
lead
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leads
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 to increased runoff and
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in
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, in
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 addition, it can impact
on
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apply
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the growth of pollution in
water
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leading
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, leading
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 through urban locations.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Precipitation
  • Absorption
  • Groundwater recharge
  • Evapotranspiration
  • Surface runoff
  • Impervious surfaces
  • Concrete
  • Asphalt
  • Stormwater systems
  • Vegetation
  • Water vapor
  • Local climate conditions
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