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In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In numerous countries around the world, junk foods are spreading rapidly and taking the place of traditional national cuisines. From my perspective, there are negative aspects of fast
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, as it is generally unhealthy. In today's world, a considerable proportion of the population argues that
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 fast
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 can lead to several health problems
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 as being overweight, diabetes and various stomach or intestinal issues.
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 doctors regularly warn about the negative effects of consuming fast
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 on TV or radio, consumers continue to eat it, especially among young people.
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 statistical information, junk cooking is widespread in cities. because
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 city dwellers tend to be busy and they often do not have enough time to cook a homemade meal.
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, they would rather order
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 type of dish than prepare
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 at home. There is a school of thought that
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 national
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 represent the face of every country, as they preserve the rich history and identity of a nation. Since
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 our ancestors celebrated all holidays with these traditional
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, they became a vital part of national culture and heritage.
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, national holidays, weddings, birthdays and other important celebrations are often celebrated by society with a variety of traditional and homemade dishes
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 of junk
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. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that,
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 is rapidly spreading across the world, traditional
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 remain consistently significant for every society.
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 a vast majority of individuals absolutely prefer traditional and homemade
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, especially when they seek both healthy and valuable
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structure
Plan with four parts: intro, two body parts, and a short ending.
content
Each body part has one main idea with a small example.
task
Make the view clear in the intro and keep it to the end.
grammar
Use simple grammar and fix run-on sentences and wrong comma use.
lexis
Use common words like 'traditional foods' and 'fast food' instead of odd phrases.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas are connected.
tone
The writer shows a clear view on the topic.
content
The essay gives ideas on health and on culture.
coherence
Some linking and examples are used.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural identity
  • heritage
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • globalization
  • nutrient-rich
  • bonding
  • local cuisine
  • fast food chains
  • convenience
  • processed ingredients
  • sustainability
  • culinary traditions
  • mass-produced
  • environmental degradation
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