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The bar chart compares the average number of visitors drawn to various activities in Canberra during weekdays and weekends in 2019. Units are measured in numbe

The bar chart compares the average number of visitors drawn to various activities in Canberra during weekdays and weekends in 2019. Units are measured in numbe
The bar chart compares the average
number
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 of
visitors
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 drawn to various activities in Canberra during weekdays and weekends in 2019. Units are measured in
number
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that cafes and restaurants attracted the highest
number
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 of
people
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 on both weekends and weekdays,
while
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 libraries were the least visited. On weekdays,
people
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 spent most of their time in the cafes and restaurants, which accounted for 150
visitors
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.
On the other hand
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, parks and shopping centres witnessed a dramatic decline than cafes and restaurants, recording 100 and 90
people
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 respectively. There was a gradual decrease in movie theatres, which attracted 70
visitors
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. Museums followed a similar downward trend, with 65 crowds. Libraries attracted only a small
number
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 of
visitors
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, with just 30
people
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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