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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart below illustrates a trend
about
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in
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 diverse energy
consumpition
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consumption
 by fuel between 1980 and 2030
in
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In
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USA
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the USA
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.
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overall
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, there is a
steadily increasing
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steady increase
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 in Petrol ,oil ,coal, and natural gas in 50 years.
we
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also can
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can also
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 find
there
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that there
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 is no
dramatically
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dramatic
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 growth in nuclear solar/wind and hydropower from 1980 to 2030. Petrol and oil
has
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have
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 a stable
raising
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rise
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. It
start
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starts
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 with a high amount from 35 to
highest
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the highest
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 point
50
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of 50
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 from 1980 to 2030.
Especially
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Especially,
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 it
increases
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increased
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sharpenly
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sharply
 from 1995 to 2005,
then
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 it
insisted
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continued
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in
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with
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 a gentle growth.
there
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There
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 are
samiliar
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similar
 trends in Coal and natural gas, they are all
expenerience
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experiencing
 a
Significantly
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significantly
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increaseing
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increasing
 in 50 years from 1980.
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Besides
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 natural gas has
a
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an
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expenerience
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experience
 without any fluctuation after
a
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an
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 overtaking in 2010.
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Nuclear
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nuclear
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nuclear,
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 solar/wind
and
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, and
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 hydropower all have
a
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apply
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flat growth
,
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;
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 there
are
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is
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 some
overtakeing
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overtaking
 between solar and hydropower. Eventually they all have a
samiliar
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similar
 trend after a slight
flucation
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fluctuation
.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depicts
  • trend
  • consumption
  • projections
  • slow growth
  • advancements
  • efficiency
  • acceleration
  • underscoring
  • expanding economy
  • household demands
  • trajectory
  • technological advancements
  • population growth
  • standards of living
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • sustainable energy policies
  • environmental impacts
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