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Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is believed that disturbance caused by an individual's
noise
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 should be controlled by applying
stirct
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strict
law
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.
Although
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 there are
few
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a few
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 disadvantages of introducing
this
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 type of
laws
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law
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, I strongly agree to see the measure, because it would reduce health
cost
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costs
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 and assist
humen
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humans
 to grow
smothly
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smoothly
, particularly
people
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 with Autism.
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 with, initiating a method of controlling
others
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others'
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behavior
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behaviour
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 can disrupt humans' natural growth.
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, human beings
prioritize
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prioritise
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to do
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doing
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that
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apply
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what their minds want to.
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, when they chat with their close ones, like friends or
families
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family
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, they love to shout and
lough
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laugh
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, and that can make
noise
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. So, if there is a rule to stop
that
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those
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 natural attitudes, it would hinder
people
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to lead
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from leading
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 a normal life.
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, stricter
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law
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laws
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 to stop
noise
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 could
also
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 lead to
mentall
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mental
 stress.
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,
people
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 who are used to
talk
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talking
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 or
lough
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laughing
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 loudly
,
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apply
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 need to stay
quiet
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quiet,
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that
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which
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 may cause
devestating
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devastating
 mental health issues
leading
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, leading
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 to death.
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,
becasue
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because
 of all these effects, a country should apply the
law
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 to control
noise
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. The prime benefit of controlling
noise
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 is
a
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apply
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long term
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long-term
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 economic stability for a state. Because Prevention is considered
as
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better than treatment,
as a
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result
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result,
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 when there
is
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a healthy
citizen
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citizens
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 in a country, it would help the
goverment
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government
 to
decline
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reduce
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 its annual budget in
this
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 sector,
rather
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so that rather
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 authority can focus on
ther
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other
 areas like education.
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Stiffer
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law
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laws
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 to reduce
noise
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 could
also
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 help to nourish
people
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 openly,
specically
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specifically
 individuals with Autism. A report by
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the Swidish
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Swidish
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Swedish
 government
as
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, as
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 an
example
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example,
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mentiontioned
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mentioned
 that
,
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apply
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 most
of
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the
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apply
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autistic children are not able to tolerate noisy places
,
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;
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as a consequence
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, they keep them unopened,
there
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and there
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 is no
quite
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quiet
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 place. In conclusion, it can be
sumarised
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summarised
 that though controlling
noise
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 could lead to some difficulties, advantages can
edge over
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outweigh
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 the disadvantages,
becasue
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because
 it can
assist to
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help
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 lower the
health care
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healthcare
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 cost and
to
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apply
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lead a better life for a specific group of
people
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.

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