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The table below shows the distribution of students at UK universities by mode of study and gender.

The table below shows the distribution of students at UK universities by mode of study and gender.
The given tables provide
a
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data about the number of
postgraduetes
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postgraduates
 in UK universities divided into two versions by the method of study and gender.
Overall
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, it is clear from the tables that in the UK the full-time mode of study was particularly dominated by men,
whereas
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 in part-time the number of female postgraduate students
were
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was
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 significantly higher.
To begin
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 with, the number of male postgraduate students in the full-time mode of study
were
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was
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lesser
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lower
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 in comparison to
part-time
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the part-time
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 mode.
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, in 1996 and
1997
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1997,
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 the numbers showed about 75,000 postgraduates
,
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;
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however
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however,
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 in part
time
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part-time
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 method
the
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, the
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numbers
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number
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 of
male
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males
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 was higher.
Furthermore
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, in the rest of the given
period
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period,
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 the numbers were
same
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the same
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However
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, women tend to graduate from
the
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apply
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UK universities more, both in full-time and part-time modes
,
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;
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therefore
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, the nu

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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