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Band 2.5

Most people argue that there should be shorter working week and longer weekends.

In recent times ,
majority
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the majority
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 of people believe that there should be
less
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fewer
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 working hours in a week,
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instead
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and instead
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 have more leisure
time
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. In my opinion,
this
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 will impact badly on our workforce
.
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badly.
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 The justification for
this
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 is given below. On one hand , productive workers who are passionate enough to work hard for their company and to earn more, will start losing interest in their jobs they do.
Due to
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 longer free hours.
For instance
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, employees spending free
time
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 more than they need,
there
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their
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 schedule and productivity will be
disturbes
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disturbed
.
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of
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apply
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which there will be a great drop in the economic growth of the company.
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, the mental
horzion
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horizon
 of those individuals
become
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becomes
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 limited
which
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develops usually
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usually develops
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on
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through
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 regular practices.
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 , more individuals
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then
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apply
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will be inclined towards resting at home.
There
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Their
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 social-development will be
effected
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affected
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 badly as their gap
of
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in
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understanding
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their understanding
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 grows wider. For evidence, studies
believes
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believe
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 that people
understands
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understand
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 and
hrows
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perform
 better in a productive environment around cooperative people where they can learn together by exchanging ideas and experiences.
Thus
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, balancing working and leisure hours is crucial for the betterment of society as work boosts
economy
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the economy
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 of the country. To recapitulate,
although
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 , workforce requires personal
time
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 for themselves but providing extra free
time
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 creates confusion and laziness among employees.

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task
Plan your essay. Start with a clear view. Then make 2 or 3 main ideas. End with a short recap.
coherence
Make your ideas fit in separate paragraphs. Each paragraph has a topic sentence. Use linking words to connect ideas.
structure
Use simple and correct words. Check spelling and form. Avoid long, run-on sentences.
task
You state your view and keep to the topic.
structure
There is a basic form of essay with an intro, body and conclusion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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