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Writing Samples
Band 3

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

I agree with
this
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 logic. There should be less
work
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 and more rest. Some countries and companies practice
this
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, but in the CIS countries, the
work
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 week is five
days
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 with two
days
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 off. Argument 1
Employees
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: Employees
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 get tired, productivity drops, and sometimes the same
work
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 has to be done several times. Argument 2
If
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: If
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 employees are given more time off, they will be more motivated to do something and will find their
work
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 more interesting. Argument 3 After a
while
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, employees will come to hate their
work
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 and will come to
work
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 not with the intention of working, but with the intention of leaving as soon as possible. In conclusion, I believe that it would be right to have 3
days
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 off and 4
days
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 of
work
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 around the world, and
then
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 productivity will increase!

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content
Add 2 or 3 clear ideas and give a real example for each to back your point.
structure
Use more linking words to show flow from one idea to the next.
structure
Make a short intro and a strong end that restates your view.
language
Watch grammar and terms; use simple words from the top 100 where you can.
content
You show a clear view and say yes to the idea.
structure
The end restates the main idea.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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