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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (Leyla)

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (Leyla)
The line graph demonstrates the quantity of
books
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 borrowed from 4 distinct types of rural libraries in 2014, from June to September. The pie chart provides information about the proportion of these
books
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, by 5 various categories.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the number of
books
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 taken from the libraries was fluctuating during the given time frame.
Moreover
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, readers showed greater interest in fiction
books
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,
while
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 the least popular book type was about self-help. Looking at the line graph in detail, it is seen that Ryeslip was the most attended library, reaching a peak of book lending numbers in June, at 300. Meanwhile, Church Mount and West Eaton witnessed an all-time low in June, at only 50
books
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.
However
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, borrowing numbers for Ryeslip experienced a noticeable decrease to reach a low of nearly 170
books
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. Focusing on the pie chart,
on the other hand
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, it is obvious that the style of fiction dominated, with 43% of all
books
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.
By contrast
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, the self-help
books
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 were less preferred by the readers, at just one-tenth.
Nevertheless
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, the other types had very similar percentages, up to 20%, biography being the most popular, at 19%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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