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Band 2.5

Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend. In your email • describe where you lived when you were a student at the university • recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation • warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

Dear John, I am glad to hear that you are going to attend Griffith University. Regarding where to live, I think that you
probaly
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probably
 should come in advance to have a general impression of
apartment
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the apartment
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 inside the campus, because I lived at Nasan Campus on a small mountain 10 years ago, and the
infrusructures
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infrastructure
 and facilities could
be
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have
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 changed today. I believe that the best way to search home is using social media,
such
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 as Facebook,
Instergram
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Instagram
, and The Red Book, where
the
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apply
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both landlords and tenants
posts
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post
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on
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about
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 their needs.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,
Joining
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joining
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in
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apply
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the campus chatting group is a wise option to pick up
idea
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ideas
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rooms
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apply
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.
Last
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 point, some roommates who look very nice in
dress
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a dress
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 may not
well
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be well
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 organised at home.You must go to visit the place they live to
have
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make
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 a right
judgement
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.
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, read the lease agreement
carefuly
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carefully
 as there may be some extra
expense
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expenses
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,
such
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 as electricity, cable line, and water supply. Anything you want to know
just
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 email me anytime
,
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 With my best wishes, Sophie

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language
Fix many spelling and grammar errors. Use simple and correct sentences. Read the text aloud to catch mistakes.
structure
Make the idea flow in a clear order: first where you lived, then how to look for a place, then what mistakes to avoid. Use paragraphs for each part.
vocabulary
Use correct phrases for places and tools. For example, say 'on campus' not 'inside the campus' and use 'Instagram' not misspelled names.
tone
Keep a friendly tone, but check word rules and keep a steady pace. Short, clear lines help.
structure
The email uses a friendly tone and has all three main parts: greeting, body, and closing.
content
It shows good intent to help and gives practical tips.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dormitories
  • rental agreements
  • house-hunting
  • budgeting
  • commute
  • utilities
  • security deposit
  • lease
  • proximity
  • amenities
  • landlord
  • tenant rights
  • real estate agent
  • furnished/unfurnished
  • flatmates
  • on-campus/off-campus living
  • viewings
  • public transportation
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