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You and your family are moving to another country, and you are looking for rented accommodation there. Write a letter to a property agent. In your letter Explain when and why you are moving Give your preference for the location of the accommodation Describe the type of accommodation that you hope to find

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know that I am looking for a
two bedroom
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two-bedroom
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 apartment in the Brantford
Downtown
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. Actually, I received a job offer from Pharmhill Company located in
the
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apply
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Brantford, Canada. Since I am supposed to start the job from October 1st, I need to find the
accomodation
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accommodation
 by
mid of September
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mid-September
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 in order to
settledown
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settle down
 before starting the position. The location
me
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and my family
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my family and
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prefer
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I prefer
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 is
Downtown
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 because the transit
terminak
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terminal
 and school are within
the
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apply
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walking distance from
Downtown
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.
Moreover
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, I do not have a car and I would need some time to get
driving
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a driving
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 licence in a new country.
Additionally
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, my kid is in pre-school, which is situated in the middle of
Downtown
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which
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 makes it a perfect location for
accomodation
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accommodation
. Would you kindly assist us in finding a
two bedroom
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two-bedroom
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 basement or apartment at a reasonable price? The only requirement is that each room should have a window because my children
is
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are
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 claustrophobic. I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely, Simranpreet Kaur

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task response
Break the letter into clear parts: say who you are and why you move in the first lines; then give where you want to live; then what kind of home you want; finish with a short end note.
coherence
Make each new idea in a new paragraph. Use simple links like and, also, but, because to join ideas.
linguistic accuracy
Check spelling and form words correctly: accommodation, mid-September, settle down, etc.
greeting closing
Top greeting and closing are good.
content quality
You give clear reasons to move and you ask for a two-bedroom home.
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