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The table shows the tourist numbers and tourist spending in five countries in 2012 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table shows the tourist numbers and tourist spending in five countries in 2012 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The table compares the
number
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 of
tourist
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tourists
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 in five
countries
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 in 2012 and
2013
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2013,
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 including the amount of
money
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 spent
on
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in
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 these
countries
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 in
billion
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billions
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of dollar$
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dollar$
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dollars
.
Overall
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,
France
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 had the most
tourists
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 in both years,
whereas
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 Italy had the
least
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fewest
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tourists
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 in both years. About the
money
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 spent on
the
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apply
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travel,
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USA
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the USA
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 was the most
spent
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money
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countries
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 in both years.
France
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 accounted for 83 million visitors in 2012, which was the most
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countries
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visited country
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 that
tourists
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visited
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apply
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,
it
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and it
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 increased to 84.7
in
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million in
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20 13
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2013
.
USA
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, Spain and Italy had the same trend
with
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as
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France
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 in
a
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the
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number
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 of
tourist
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tourists
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 that increase per year.
On the contrary
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, China experienced a downward trend
about
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in
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 the
number
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 of
tourist
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tourists
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 since the
number
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 of
tourists
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 decreased to 55.7 million people. In terms of spending
money
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while
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traveling
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travelling
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,
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USA
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the USA
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 was the most spent
money
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, which made up
at
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apply
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$126.2 billion US in 2012 and increased to US$139.6 billion in 2013.
France
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, Spain, China and Italy experienced an upward trend
about
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in
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 spending
money
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 during the trip,
as well as
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USA
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the USA
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, countries, money, france, tourists, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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