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Band 2

Practice 1: These days, the wealhty in society often throw away perfectly good products in order to replace them with more up-to-date models. Do the environmental disadvantages of this development outweigh the economic advantages?

Nowadays, the consumption of
up - to - date
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up-to-date
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models
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model
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products
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often
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, often
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well - liked
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well-liked
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 by the wealthy,
in contrast
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, perfectly good commodities are being
threw
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thrown
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 away. It is my belief that the environmental
disadvatages
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disadvantages
 could certainly offset the economic benefits. There are several benefits to replacing them with
upgrading
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upgraded
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 models
instead
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 of using perfectly good
products
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,
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.
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 A common reason is that - provide the standard of industrial technology, fashion,.. -> people prefer
purchase
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to purchase
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 the appearance of merchandise
to
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over
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 their high
-
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apply
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quality. -
encourage
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 companies to improve their creativity of
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products
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their products
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.
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, in spite of these advantages, the impact of environmental disadvantages can bring about several drawbacks. One obvious disadvantage is that -
modern
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products
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 need energy and natural resources. -> .... consuming electricity -> carbon emission -
outdated
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productes
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products
 which have thrown away in landfills can
effect
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contribute
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 to
the
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apply
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global warming or increase
high
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apply
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carbon
.
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emissions.
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 In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers to the
effection
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effect
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due to
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 the rich who will choose the modern supplies
instead
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 of the old
products
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 are more obvious than the possible benefits.

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structure
Make a plan before writing: start with a short intro that says your view, then 2 body paragraphs with one big idea in each, and end with a short conclusion.
language
Use basic grammar and small, simple sentences. Check spelling and fix common errors.
content
Give a clear answer to the task and add a small example or fact to back up each point.
cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, then, but, so, also, therefore to show flow.
structure
The writer shows a clear end view of the issue.
ideas
There are several good ideas about how the issue may affect money and world.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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