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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own

Nowadays,
people
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 are using
cars
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 and private vehicles
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, Which
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Which
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which
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the
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a
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 problem for
traffic
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. thats
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thats
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 why
somepeople belived
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some people believe
 that
goverments
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governments
 ought to
take
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impose
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 taxes
from
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on
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the
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apply
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car owners and
use
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 that money to development for public transportation.
in
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this
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eassy
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essay
 we will discuss about
benefites
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benefits
 and
drowbak
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drawbacks
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the publice
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publice
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public
. On the one hand, to
prevent
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apply
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reduce the
trffic
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traffic
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urben
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urban
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area
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areas
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, govenments
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govenments
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governments
 do some
stap
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steps
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is
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are
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benifecial
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beneficial
 for
public
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the public
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.If it has less
traffic
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 on the
roads
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roads,
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 it may couses of accidents.
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,there
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are
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advantages
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also
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 pollution reduction.If they take
taxies
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taxis
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 to the
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cars
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car
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owners
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owners,
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 they generate new revenue.
people
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use
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publice trasports
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public transport
such
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 as
a
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apply
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buses,
tram
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trams
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,trains and more.
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secondly
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,to prevent
of
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apply
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the less
traffic
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, chidrens
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chidrens
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children
are
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can
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 walk easily.
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Also
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cars
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car
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 accidents are common in
urben
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urban
areas
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areas,
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 it will
be
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apply
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decrease and
public
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use public
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use
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bus
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buses
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,
tram
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trams
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 and
metro
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metros
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insted
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instead
 of
the
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apply
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private vehicles.
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, in
europen
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European
 countries
people
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 are using public
trasportion
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transportation
 because it is easy to take and no
traffic
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 on the roads.
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, some family are living in
out
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apply
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of city
area
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so
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, so
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 they need to take
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a cars
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cars
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car
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 because it has no public
bus
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buses
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 or any
traspotation
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transportation
 from their
area
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.
For
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To
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 manage their
time
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time,
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thay
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they
 ought to
use
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 private vehicles.If
authority
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the authority
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take
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takes
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hight
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high
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 taxes on
car
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cars
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 lead to
publice
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public
 dissatisfaction and
causing
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cause
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 political issues.
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secondly
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,
It
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it
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 can
be
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lead to
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 public backlash,
people
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are do
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may
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 protest and
opose
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oppose
to
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apply
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the rule.
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Also
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 every family can not afford
hight taxies
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high taxis
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.
Goverments
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Governments
 give them public
trasport
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transport
 quality
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such
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, such
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 as in every rural
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area
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area,
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has
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have
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 buses and
traspotation
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transportation
facility
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facilities
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. In conclusion,public
transports
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transport
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are
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is
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 beneficial for everyone
but
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, but
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 it has
drowback
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drawbacks
 too.
in
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opinion
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opinion,
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 if
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the goverment
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goverment provied
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government provided
facelity
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facilities
 to
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transportation
traspotation
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traspotation,
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people
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are
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would
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taking
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take
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 all
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the benefiets
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benefiets
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benefits
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task
Plan your essay first. Make one plan with two sides and a view. Then write the intro, two body parts, and a short end.
grammar
Use short and clear sentences. Break long lines into small parts to avoid run on thoughts.
coherence
Start each part with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words to show how ideas are linked.
content
Give one or two real life examples. Say how they show your point in your own life or in your area.
lexical
Check words you spell and learnt words. Fix common miss words like tax, urban, transport, pollution.
organization
You show both sides and have a plan with ‘on the one hand’ and ‘on the other hand’.
content
There is some effort to give ideas on traffic and use of tax money for public transport.
language
You have a basic idea of argument that can be built further with better language.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic congestion
  • Emissions
  • Revenue generation
  • Public dissatisfaction
  • Political issues
  • Financial burden
  • Environmental benefits
  • Efficiency and accessibility
  • Taxation
  • Heavily taxing
  • Private car owners
  • Fund improvements
  • Discourage the use
  • Healthier environment
  • Public transport quality
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