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The table and the chart below provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in 4 countries.

The table and the chart below provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in 4 countries.
The chart and table demonstrate the finances spent weekly and the total cost of expenditure by students in 4 countries.
Overall
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, both charts experienced different trends.
While
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 country D spent less money
for
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 needs, country A was the most expensive among others. Regarding the table , which shows
total
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the total
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 expenditure of studying abroad.
County
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 A dominated at 875 dollars for all needs that students
can
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may
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 face the studying abroad. Between
county
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 B and C was about a 200-dollar difference. Notably, living and learning in
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county
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County
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 D needs twice as little finance than A.
By contrast
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, the bar chart illustrates the average amount of money spent by students per week. Living cost constitutes the highest price among others in
every
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four countries.
Cost
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The cost
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 of tuition was approximately similar
at
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 358 to 250 dollars.
However
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, accommodation was surprisingly cheap in all countries , between 220 and 280 dollars.
Notibly
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Notably
,
for
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living in
county
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 A needs
duble
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double
 more money
reather
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rather
 than
county
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 D

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words county with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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