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The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The layout describes the
Town
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 centre in 1990 and how it looks in the present.
Overall
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, there are several changes in the map of the
town
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highlighting
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, highlighting
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 a larger area for
shopping
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the shopping
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 mall and
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the broadway
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broadway
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Broadway
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 crossing for the people. In
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the 1990's
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1990's
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1990s
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, there
were
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was
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range
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a range
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 of stores
includiing
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including
 the Newsagency, the Grocer's, the Baker's, the Butcher's, the cafe and the
Children
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Children's
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 Centre to the north of the
town
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.
This
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 is
further
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 changed entirely to Shopping Mall
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whereas
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Children
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the Children
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 section is kept intact. To the north-eastern side, there is a bank which is
same
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the same
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 in the new layout. The park, Library and a
Town
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 hall are kept
same
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the same
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 in both
the
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apply
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format
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formats
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but
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, but
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 beside
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town
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the town
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hall
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hall,
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 another bank was replaced with
the
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a
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 Cafe. The
green street
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Green Street
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 Community is replaced with an apartment
blocks
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block
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. The Newton
street
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Street
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provide
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provides
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 the way for the residents. The pedestrian crossing was included at
the
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apply
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various points for the citizens.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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